Get Your Own Dinner

If I died

you would finger paint

your menu choices

with my blood

kick my corpse

to fetch and carry

stretch my skin

into a tray

use my hair

to stuff your pillows

push shoes

on to my flaccid feet

and send me out to hunt

I am

gnawed through:

a severed cord

lying in

a pool of soured milk

Get your own dinner

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19 responses to “Get Your Own Dinner

  1. I’ve written a lot of poems about the joy I feel around my children: this is the other side of the coin. A bad day…a very bad day….peace FatW

  2. I think you know how I feel about this..it’s intoxicating…nothing wrong in getting in touch with your bad side Ace …nothing at all πŸ™‚ Brilliant. I try to find a particular line that I really adore…but sadly I cannot choose one at all.

    • Aww thanks rambly…do you think it’s better now I have acted on panda’s criticisms?

      • You are welcome – I would have to go back and read the original, but I am a firm believer of trying new methods but retaining one’s own voice throughout, for as we know poetry/prose is so very subjective and what is disliked by one, or felt needs change may be loved by others. I’m off to bed-e-byes now (I want to stay up) but I’m weary, so I shall have a look tomorrow night and give you my ‘professional’ cough-cough opinion πŸ™‚ x

  3. I love your re-write of this… very good… I love it partially because I relate all too well… I think all mother’s have these days/moments… its just that only some of us are truly brave enough to admit it… big breaths Face, big breaths… *hug*

  4. I loves it – and not just because I had a tiny paw in it πŸ˜‰
    This is the best parenting poem I’ve read – real, comic, horrific (hair pillows – so dark) and all this in a handful of words. Wonderful πŸ™‚

  5. Pingback: Guest Blogger – FatW gets mean all over her own ass! (oh my god that sounds disgusting!) | ruleofstupid

  6. I love this poem – you couldn’t have described parenthood better – and I also love your Panda post. You sound just like him! πŸ™‚

  7. Searing. And brilliant poetry. I’m not a mum but I sure know my mum had days like this.
    What a great way to vent!
    Can’t remember how I found you, but I think you’re poetry is brilliant. Looking forward to more.

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  9. The Panda-link sent me. Oh God. Will you come over to my house and tell this to my family? I’m on my way out. Love it.
    Alice

  10. Jiggly Bits blogroll got me to visit. I’m glad I did. – John

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